Jeff Miles was the best basketball player on his team. He was the best point guard in the league and his team, the Jaguars, was in the championship. They were facing the Raptors. They were always the league powerhouse and had won the last three championships. The Jaguars, and especially Jeff, needed to play exceptionally well to win this game. They had really tough practices all week to make sure they were well prepared to play in the biggest game of their lives.
As for the Raptors, they were confident that they would win this game. They have more talent, more championship experience, and better coaching. They had the best player in the area in Brandon Johnson. He was their go to guy and could not be stopped. Almost every team that played against the Raptors had a plan to stop Brandon, but they couldn’t. The Jaguars had a plan to stop Brandon, but they knew it would still be a very tough job.
As the sun rose on Saturday morning, Jeff woke up excited and anxious to play in the championship game. He arrived at the gym two hours before game time to be as fresh and warmed up as possible. As the clock was ticking, players from his team and the Raptors were arriving. He knew the game was getting closer and Jeff was getting nervous. Then he looked up at the scoreboard and there was only five minutes left until the game. Both teams were pumped and ready to play. Then the buzzer went off, and the championship game was about to start.
The starters walked out on the floor and shook hands. Then the two centers stood at half court along with the referee and the game began. The Raptors won the tip and passed it to Brandon for an easy layup. The Raptors put on their devastating full court press and forced a turnover. The Raptors made a three pointer and were out in front quickly. The Jaguars broke the press and Jeff hit a three from the corner. The Jaguars started to go on a run at the end of the quarter. With five seconds left in the quarter, Jeff stole the ball and made a layup to beat the buzzer. The Jaguars were pumped until they saw Jeff lying on the floor screaming. Jeff hurt his ankle really bad and would be out for the rest of the game. In the Jaguar huddle, their coach said they had to overcome this and they could still win this game, but the players didn’t think they could do it.
The next two quarters didn’t go too well for the Jaguars. They were struggling on offense and couldn’t stop the Raptors on defense. Brandon Johnson was dominating the game and at the end of the third quarter the score was 55-42 Raptors. Bandon had 29 points and his team had all the momentum going into the fourth quarter. The fourth quarter started with the Jaguars getting the ball. They moved the ball nicely and they made a wide open three. Then the Jaguars decided to full court press. The Raptors had Brandon bring the ball up but he wasn’t that good of a ball handler. The Jaguars put a lot of pressure on him and forced him to make a bad pass. They stole the ball and Bob, the Jaguars other good player, made an easy layup. The Jaguars were coming back and the Raptors coach called a timeout. After the timeout, the Raptors had Brandon on the wing and passed it to him for an open shot. He missed the shot and Bob got the rebound and went coast to coast for another easy layup. The Jaguars kept their press on and stole the ball and hit a three pointer. The Raptors called another timeout and the Jaguars were only down six with two minutes remaining. The Raptors didn’t score their first possession after the timeout and the Jaguars made a three. The Jaguars once again forced a turnover and made an easy two. Then the Jaguars called a timeout to set up their defense.
There was 30 seconds left and the Raptors had the ball winning by a point. The Raptors put the ball in Brandon’s hands and with six seconds left he drove to the hoop and got fouled. He had two free throws. He made the first with ease but missed the second one. The Jaguars got the rebound and made a quick pass up to Bob. Bob made a spin move around the defender and spotted up for a three with one second left. It felt like slow motion when the ball was in the air. Then, it finally came down and it swooshed through the hoop. The Jaguar players and fans erupted into clapping and cheering. The Jaguars were jumping up and down at half court and they picked up Bob and held him up for his game winning shot. Then they went over to Jeff and they gave him high fives. The Jaguar players knew that they won because they never gave up. They knew it was going to be to win with Jeff on the bench, but they overcame the odds.
9 comments:
Kyle, i liked your story. it showed team work and had a great theme. this story made me think about a really important NBa game then a high school game. even though it was relastic. i thought the main character didn't change because nothing devasting affested him and his personality didn't change either. i think that it was good the character didn't change because if he did it would be in a negative change.my favorite part was obviously the climax because its what every bball player wants to do. great job!
Kyle C- What a great tale Ky. I really enjoyed the overall topic of the story and how the Jags were the underdogs and that the opposing team had their own stellar player. I am not going to lie and say that you didn’t have any grammar or spelling mistakes because you did have a few of them. The vocab you used while describing the game was fantasty and brought me into the story a lot. I also liked how Little Jeffery Miles was injured in the first quarter and couldn’t play for the rest of the game. But the team still found a way to prevail in the harsh times of injustice and turmoil. Keep up the good work dude.
I liked this story a lot. I agree with Garrett that this story showed the importance of teamwork and never giving up. I was surprised that they won the game even after Jeff was injured because I thought that it would make them lose. But they were determined to win and because they worked together, they made it happen. The main character didn't really change throughout the story. My favorite part was the climax because I didn't think that was going to happen. I didn't find any spelling or grammar errors.
Kyle,
Great story. I really liked the detail you used to tell what was going on during the game. It was very easy to picture what was going on. the main character changed throughout the story because at the beginning, the Jaguars had little confidence in winning. But through teamwork, they won the championship.
My favorite part of the story was the climax, because you really wanted the Jaguars to win, and they did. I don't see any errors in your writing. Nice job.
Good story Kyle. This story had a really good message and although they lost their best player they kept on playing and used good teamwork. I don't think the main character changed at all during the story. The best part was definitely when the team decided they could still when without their best player. I think the detail used when talking about the game is really good. Maybe in the future you could spell more words correctly. It was a good story Kyle C
Kyle your story was nice. My reaction was i was happy that the jaguars won the game even though Jeff got hurt. The image I saw was when Bob made the game winning three. The main character, Jeff, did not change throughout the story and this is important because he remained a vital played to the team. My favorite part of the story was when Bob made the three, and this was the climax. I thought this tales best quality was the way he tied it all up in the end. He tied it up because the players congratulated the hurt Jeff, although he barely played, on how the Jaguars won the game. Nice job Ky Ky!
Kyle James Callahan -
wow. i give that a round of applause.great story man. amazing, exceptional. i believe this was one of your best stories you have written, or atleast that i have read. i liked the word choice you used. it really pulled the story together. i also felt like i could relate to this story, being me a great basketball player and last game i was injured so my team mates had to step it up a few notches to match me. one thing i would say to improve on is to check your spelling and grammar. great job ky-ky caillou
Kyle, thus was a great story. I don't play basketball, but I still loved it. Seeing the underdogs come out like that was great. I agree with Wes, by saying that this is the best story you have written and i have read. Detail was great, and it enhanced the story immensely. There were a few spelling mistakes, but aside from that this was flawless!
Nice story Kyle. I really liked how you used a lot of detail in your story because I could really tell what’s going on. The main character did change because in the beginning they didn’t have much confidence, but in they end they won the championship. My favorite part of the story is when Bob made the three, because this was the climax. I thought this was the best because he tied it up in the end because the players congratulated Jeff. I think that the only thing that you could fix is some grammar mistakes because some words were not spelt right.
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