Sunday, March 23, 2008

The Struggles of Santiago by Chloe S.

Everyone struggles with powerful obstacles that affect their character, and determine what kind of a person they really are. Such is true for the old fisherman Santiago in Ernest Hemingway’s novel, The Old Man and the Sea. After 84 days of bad luck, Santiago ventured out on the ocean and was faced with loneliness, his own physical limitations, and dangerous sharks. These troubles help shape who Santiago is.

Santiago used to be married, but his wife was gone. In his small home “Once there had been a tinted photograph of his wife on the wall, but he had taken it down because it made him too lonely to see it” (16). The other fisherman in the village ignored or made fun of him. Santiago’s only friend and companion was Manolin, a young boy who he fished with. After all Santiago’s bad luck however, Manolin was forbidden to fish with him. When Santiago went out on the sea to catch the giant marlin, he had no one to help him, and no one to talk to. At various times during the story, Santiago commented on how he wished Manolin was there. But he didn’t let his loneliness bring him back to shore, which shows his bravery. Sometimes the journeys you take by yourself are the most important, because everyone needs time alone to think.

Santiago was not exactly a young man, unlike the other fisherman in his village. During his battle with the marlin however, the labor Santiago struggled with is labor intended for younger men. The marlin pulled the boat for a long time, while Santiago tightened and gripped ropes. He got cramps and rigor mortis in his hands from working so hard. He was especially frustrated by his physical limitations when “He could feel the steady hard pull of the line and his left hand was cramped. It drew up tight on the cord and he looked at it in disgust” (58). He also went long periods of time without food or sleep, and had to deal with fatigue and exhaustion. Other men would have given up, but for Santiago it seemed as if the wearier he was, the harder he tried.

When Santiago finally did hook the marlin and was taking it back, he was faced with something more dangerous. Sharks, attracted by the marlin’s blood, began to swarm his small boat. They weren’t nice either, “They were hateful sharks, bad smelling, scavengers as well as killers. And when they were hungry they would bite at an oar or the rudder of a boat” (107). They began to gnaw at the dead marlin that Santiago had tried so hard to catch. Santiago exerted tremendous effort to ward them off, and he was fighting for more than just a fish. He was fighting for respect, and for a broken streak of bad luck. But the sharks came in groups, and were enormous. Pretty soon the marlin was reduced to bones. Santiago had to accept the fact that the marlin was gone.

Even though in the end, the sharks destroyed the marlin, Santiago was not defeated. He had done what he’d wanted to do from the start. He faced the deep, immense ocean with no one but himself to talk to, but wasn’t scared about being alone. Santiago didn’t think twice about old age, cramps, or fatigue. He risked his life without hesitation, and showed amazing strength. And when the sharks came, Santiago gave everything he had to prevent them from eating the marlin. When he got home he realized that it wasn’t about actually catching the marlin. It was about how he did it, with courage and determination. The obstacles affected him positively, because if there hadn’t been anything to overcome, his voyage wouldn’t have been as meaningful. The other fishermen knew that Santiago’s journey had been a success, and Santiago knew it too.

9 comments:

Anonymous said...

Chlo,
Great job on the essay! I liked how you incorporated the quotes into your essay. You used great detail in describing each obstacle. Your thesis was nicely stated and your conclusion was great. You clearly showed what the three struggles were and described each one. The only thing I noticed was that the quotations should go on the other side of the page numbers and after the period. I thought your essay was really good and I wouldn't change a thing. Great Job!

Anonymous said...

Good job, Chloe!!
i think your thesis was really clear. "Everyone struggles with powerful obstacles that affect their character, and determine what kind of a person they really are. Such is true for the old fisherman Santiago in Ernest Hemingway’s novel, The Old Man and the Sea." It was really strong and engaging.
i think your third supporting paragraph was the best. you used a lot of deatail, and i think the quote worked really well in this paragraph.
the one thing i think you did really well in this essay was your choice of quotes. you made them so that they were a part of your sentences, and i thought that was really good. "He was especially frustrated by his physical limitations when 'He could feel the steady hard pull of the line and his left hand was cramped. It drew up tight on the cord and he looked at it in disgust' (58)."
i don't really have any advice for improvement. i thought it was really good!

Anonymous said...

chloe,
i new what you thesis sentence was right away. "Everyone struggles with powerful obstacles that affect their character, and determine what kind of a person they really are. Such is true for the old fisherman Santiago in Ernest Hemingway’s novel, The Old Man and the Sea."
i liked all of your quotes. they all worked really well with what you were saying throughout the paragraphs.
i loved the whole story, and so there is nothing you should change.

Anonymous said...

Chloe,
Your essay was very interesting to read. i just wanted to keep reading on. your thesis statement was clear and it stood out.
In your first paragraph, i liked how you used a lot detail. First you started talking about how he was lonely and missed his wife then you went and talked about Manolin and how he wasnt allowed to fish with Santiago.
In your second paragraph, i liked how you used different examples to the old man and how he struggled by fishing at an old age. And the rest of your paragraphs were good to. i liekd how you ended your essay. i thought it was very strong. there really is no advice i can give you. Good job!

Anonymous said...

Chloe!
Wow, really strong essay. I think that your thesis “The Old Man and the Sea. After 84 days of bad luck, Santiago ventured out on the ocean and was faced with loneliness, his own physical limitations, and dangerous sharks. These troubles help shape who Santiago is.” Was really strong and defiantly was interesting and made me want to read on. I think that that was one of your strongest parts, you also used good vocabulary and lots of detail. “They were hateful sharks, bad smelling, scavengers as well as killers. And when they were hungry they would bite at an oar or the rudder of a boat” (107). I think that that was your strongest quote of the essay, and the one that supported the text the most. I would not have any suggestions for you, because your essay was awesome. Loved it ! Great job!

Anonymous said...

Chloe!
Wow, really strong essay. I think that your thesis “The Old Man and the Sea. After 84 days of bad luck, Santiago ventured out on the ocean and was faced with loneliness, his own physical limitations, and dangerous sharks. These troubles help shape who Santiago is.” Was really strong and defiantly was interesting and made me want to read on. I think that that was one of your strongest parts, you also used good vocabulary and lots of detail. “They were hateful sharks, bad smelling, scavengers as well as killers. And when they were hungry they would bite at an oar or the rudder of a boat” (107). I think that that was your strongest quote of the essay, and the one that supported the text the most. I would not have any suggestions for you, because your essay was awesome. Loved it ! Great job!

Anonymous said...

Chloe I absolutely loved your essay. Your thesis, “After 84 days of bad luck, Santiago ventured out on the ocean and was faced with loneliness, his own physical limitations, and dangerous sharks. These troubles help shape who Santiago is.”, really stood out. You put a great amount of detail into it as well as vocabulary. The quote that stood out to me the most was “Once there had been a tinted photograph of his wife on the wall, but he had taken it down because it made him too lonely to see it” (16). It showed that Santiago was very lonely. I thought that this quote showed that he really didn’t have anyone. On thing that I think one thing you could do better next time, is tell the story in your own words, and not summarize the book as much. Over all I think you did a fabulous job!

Anonymous said...

Good essay Chloe. I really liked it. Your thesis was clear, and easy to understand. It really described the obstacles he went through. Your third quote was great. It really supported the paragraph and your entire essay really well. Great choice of the quote. You used good vocabulary, and the story flowed well from paragraph to paragraph. I think the essay was great, and nothing needs changing.

Anonymous said...

Chloe,
I loved reading your essay. I thought it was very well written. "Everyone struggles with powerful obstacles that affect their character, and determine what kind of a person they really are. Such is true for the old fisherman Santiago in Ernest Hemingway’s novel, The Old Man and the Sea." I thought that your thesis satement was very clear. I thought the second paragraph was the best. It had a alot of detail. I thought all your quotes were fantastic and really made each paragraph stronger. Overall it was a very good essay. Keep up the good work!