Sunday, March 23, 2008

Washing Away Fishy Obstacles by Danielle L.

Santiago, in the book written by Ernest Hemingway, the Old Man and the Sea, has many obstacles to overcome on his journey. He is a very tough, old man who always tries to find the good in situations that are otherwise depressing and unbearable. Among the many obstacles he faces are the cramping of his hand, maintaining his sanity, and the lack of food and supplies. Some fisherman would give up under these conditions, but Santiago keeps on rowing.

First, an obstacle that gets in
Santiago’s way is his cramped hand. It becomes cramped from being in the same position for a long period of time. It was not minor, but a major problem, resulting in him experiencing pain and a partial loss of strength. This challenged his efforts in catching the marlin. Clearly Santiago worries about his ability to control the fish when he says, ‘“God help me to have the cramp go because I do not know what the fish is going to do”’ (60). It prevents him from tightly holding onto the line. Santiago is worried that if he can not hold onto the line tight enough and the marlin does something drastic, he will lose the fish. Knowing that the left hand is weak, it does not come as a surprise that it cramped. He explains a time when he won an arm wrestling match with his right hand and lost a practice match with his left.

Second,
Santiago has to maintain his sanity. The reader continues to question Santiago’s state of mind when he talks to his hand and says, ‘“Be patient, hand, I do this for you”’(59). This shows that the old man is lonely, as there are frequent comments made about wishing the boy, Manolin, were there. This makes sense because it is evident that Manolin is thought of as either a close relative or friend. Also, food and an adequate amount of fresh water are not available. So, he has to catch and eat raw fish and conserve the only water that is left. Loneliness, dehydration, and malnutrition all played a roll in the slipping away of reality.

Third, lack of food and supplies causes the chances of successfully bringing the marlin back to subside. Having no idea that the short trip would turn into a long voyage, he is not nearly prepared for what will be faced at sea. As a result, he has to catch his own food and fight off the savage sharks with what he has to make do with. Lacking food and supplies, the author expresses
Santiago’s fear in this horrible situation when he says, ‘“Now it’s over [Santiago] thought. They will probably hit me again. But what can a man do against them in the dark without a weapon?”’ (117). All that was available, including a knife, a broken oar, harpoon, his fist, and a tiller, was lost. Losing his remaining supplies, Santiago is forced into letting the beasts (the sharks) steal his prized possession (the marlin). If he would have had the right equipment and supplies available, most likely there would be a greater chance of bringing back the full fish, but instead he only had the memories and stories to pass along.

Santiago overcomes a cramped hand, a lack of sanity, and a lack of supplies in his big challenge – the fight with the marlin. Because of his joyous attitude, determination, strength, and wisdom, accomplishments were made. This book really shows how dangerous and difficult a job at sea really is. Santiago is amazing because he was able to endure all of this and come out alive. This shows that he is truly a legendary figure.

5 comments:

Anonymous said...

Your thesis is easy to find, and clear. Your third informational paragraph was your best. Not only was it the longest, but it contained voice and many examples about the sharks eating the marlin. You also explained the quote to help the reader. Your conclusion paragraph was great. It summed up the essay, while explaining little bits of detail that were left out of the story, and gave the reader all the info they needed about the book at the same time.

My favorite line was, “Having no idea that the short trip would turn into a long voyage, he is not nearly prepared for what will be faced at sea. As a result, he has to catch his own food and fight off the savage sharks with what he has to make do with.” There was excellent word choice in it, and voice.

My advice is to make it longer and more detailed. There are a few places that need to be elaborated on, but that’s it. I thought it was great.

Anonymous said...

hey danielle
i thought your thesis statement was very clear and focused. your beginning paragraph made me want to keep reading. i too liked the line that jessica picked. it describes the way santiago was probably thinking and it went well into your essay. i really liked your use of vocabulary. a few things that you could work on is that i thought you repeated yourself a little too much about having no food and water. i thought you talked about it in almost each paragraph. but other than that it was good. great job!

Anonymous said...

I really liked your essay. I think that your introductory paragraph was really good. Although you last detail paragraph had the most information and detail. Throughout your essay you had great diction and vocabulary. My favorite quote was the first one because I thought that you explained it really well. I think that you really read and understood the book and were able to give clear and accurate details about your ideas and providequotes that made sence. I think that you did a great job.

Anonymous said...

a very good story again, Danielle, and the thesis statement makes alot of sense in the begining paragraph, and entices me easily. It makes alot of sense.‘“Be patient, hand, I do this for you”’(59). This stands out because it works well with thestory, and makes alot of sense. one thing this essay does well is that there is nothig wrong with grammar, and it flows very nicely. I do not comsider anything, but more information in areas it looks less for. Very nice story Danielle.

Anonymous said...

Danielle,
Fantastic job on the essay. It was very clear that your thesis was about Santiago's obsticles. What I liked was your word choice that kept my attention. ‘“Be patient, hand, I do this for you”’(59). I liked this quote because when I was reading the book I thought that he was losing his mind. I definately thought that this was an obsticle for him because he isn't thinking clearly when making decisions. What I liked the most in your essay was the conclusion. "Because of his joyous attitude, determination, strength, and wisdom, accomplishments were made." I really liked it because you used numerous adjectives describing Santiago and it made it end with a pop. I think I would suggest that you look at your grammar. Exellent!