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I give my dad the money in exchange for his credit card. I punch in the numbers on my keyboard and type in my address for it to be delivered to. It’s complete. 7-8 business days it will finally be here. I give my dad back his card with a big happy grin on my face as he asked me “are you sure you want to buy something this expensive?” Without hesitation I say “yes.” It’s the fifth day and I can’t wait any longer. The Fed-Ex truck starts rumbling down the street. He gets closer and closer every second that I watch it. Finally it slows down and rolls to a stop. The man starts walking up my driveway and before he could get to the door I run out and take the package from him. It is addressed to Melissa Bak. I get a pare of scissors and start to cut the tape off. I open the box and look inside. I see it… all white and shiny and new with my name engraved on the back. The headphones in a wrapper and no fingers have touched them until now. I took it out and lifted it to eye level. It was my ipod.
I’ve had my ipod forever now. Almost 3 years. I use it almost everyday whether I’m in the car listening to it or it is in my IHome and I’m listening to it in the shower. I download the latest from Itunes and add it to my 200 something song collection. Taylor Swift, Soulja Boy, Carrie Underwood, Akon, Lifehouse, The Jonas Brothers, Plain White T’s and Daughtry are just a few examples of some artists that are on my ipod.
Some ways that I use my ipod would be going on runs with it, relaxing with it, focusing with it, and sometimes getting pumped up for my games or swim meets with it. Sometimes at practice we take long runs or sometimes at home I’ll go out for a run so I will take my ipod out push the headphones in my ears and concentrate on the music rather than how long I have to run since running isn’t my favorite thing in the world. I relax with some songs on my ipod sometimes if it is really later and I can’t get to sleep because I’d be really excited about something I’ll put my ipod on to some calmer music and try to get to sleep. I focus
Where on our way as we pass two state lines as we get more excited ever mile we get closer. Finally we get off the exit and see street lights again. We take a right, then a left and round three bends. We roll down our windows and stick out our heads to get a strong whiff of the salty beach. Finally a house that looks familiar. The one I’ve been in ever since I was born. We run inside to find our cousins already in their bathing suits and beach toys by there sides. They look at us and say “Let’s Go!” and once I watch them all run out the door down the street I then know I’m finally here, in Moody Beach, Maine.
Moody beach,
The beach is my favorite place to go in
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Everyone values things differently whether they have a value or a memory. Things that are priceless seem more needed and makes me happier than things with a money value. My ipod is one of many things that I value very much. Someone would have the ability to take it away from me but not my priceless times. Going to
3 comments:
This is really good, I think that everyone should read this. This is was value and priceless is all about. Your family vacations sound really fun, and your ipod sounds good too. Your ipod sounds like it's been through a lot but I can tell that you like it a lot. Also your vacation seems to be a blast. I can tell that you have a really good time and you cherish your vacation.
Melissa Bak,
I really liked your essay. I thought your intoduction was a very good opening statement. You used a lot of detail on your family vacations. You really made the reader think that was your favorite priceless moment ever. They seem like a lot of fun too. I can also tell you love your ipod. In the furute i would use a little more vocabulary, but overall amazing jod!
Melissa,
Your essay came out really good! You clearly showed that you value both your ipod and going to Maine. You, as well as many others, stated that you value your priceless moment more which makes sense to me. My favorite part of your essay was when you talked about going to Maine. When you said, "We roll down our windows and stick out our heads to get a strong whiff of the salty beach," I felt like I was right there with you. Word choice and description were used very well in this essay. Those are definitely two of your strengths. I think there may be a few grammar mistakes with the dialogue but that can easily be fixed. GOOD JOB!
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